Poetry

Write AWay: "A teenager is a car on the on-ramp to the highway."

Reflect:
Agree? Disagree? How so? Elaborate.

The metaphor is first cousin to the simile.

"A caterpillar is an upholstered worm."

a comparison that shows how 2 things that are not alike in most ways are similar in another important way.

Examples:

• She is a night owl
• You are my sunshine
• the road was a winding ribbon
• That quiz was a piece of cake

Try...

• My fingers were __after hours in the cold.
• Her angry words were to him.
• Laughter is
• My kid's room is a

Extended metaphor:
MAKES use of multiple interrelated metaphors within an overarching one.

Example:
"All the world’s a stage,
And all the men and women merely players;
They have their exits and their entrances;
And one man in his time plays many parts" -Shakespeare

Re-visit Write Away:
How is a teenager like a car on a highway
on-ramp?

Poem: "Bumper Sticker" by Anne Bosselar
breaking down metaphors

Goals:

• Mark it up as we read
• Summary, Response, Analysis
• unpack 3 metaphors

Summary:

• What "happens"
• make sure you understand words, ideas, can follow the logic.

Response:
How do you feel?
How do you connect?
What do you think?

Analysis:
How does it work? poet’s intentions?
How are the metaphors effective?

Write Away:
In "Louder than a Bomb," Nate’s mother says he was a quiet child, yet he is a strong writer and performer. How do you think poetry can help someone find their voice?
Is there something that you do (writing, art, music, Dance, etc.) that helps you express yourself?

Write:
write about your own life as a car extended metaphor.
Be specific about the details. Be prepared to share.

Next:
exchange/read with a Partner

ASK each writer 3 questions:
1. appearance
2. Performance
3. Journey/Terrain

Consider...

• appearance
• performance
• condition
• journey
• terrain
• contents/passengers

Student example?

• The humble gray van

Next:
Family Metaphors

The plan:
1. Vehicle Personal metaphor
2. Family metaphor
3. Object metaphor

Due today: Poetry Paragraph: draft one

Draft 1

• Rough but complete
• has a beginning, middle, end
• Graphic Organizer or paragraph form
• Can be longer than one page; should not be shorter
• can include questions/notes re: confusion, uncertainty

Quick Checklist

• MLA Heading?
• Two-part title?
• Double spaced?
• POem in quotation marks?
• Parenthetical citations?

nEW Color: Draft Reflection

• What is going well? Feeling confident about...
• revision goals?

Writing Groups: (iPad, journal, Pen)

• Exchange emails and poems.
• Read each-other's poems (aloud?)
• Jot down observations and inferences re: language, meaning, tone
• Listen as others discuss your poem
• THen, share your own thoughts. What new insights did you gain?

Writing Groups

• 6. THen, share your topic sentence
• 7. Discuss
• 8. Then, share paragraph: all eyes on the doc (read aloud?)
• 9. Group-members share feedback: questions, suggestions, etc.

H.W.

• 1. Feedback to one group-member (make sure everyone gets a person)
• -use comment function to leave 2 questions, 2 comments (min.)

Comment tips

• -"As a Reader.."
• -focus on ideas and organization over surface errors
• -open-ended questions over "you shoulds"

Reflect on Product:

• An area of strength or improvement?
• Where would you like me to focus my feedback?

Personal Metaphor Experiment

• Characteristics of the object?
• personal connections?
• I am a (OBJECT) because like a (object) I am...

Which one is best?
How could you extend it?
Maybe think of a better one?

Revision=
Re-Vision

Write Away:

• Read the Warmth of the messy page from The Poetry Foundation (10 minutes)
• Copy a line that makes you think.
• Respond: What ideas does it spark? How could you apply it to your own revision process?

Read through your poems: Pick 2 to Workshop: goals?

Writing Groups

• Purpose?
• Norms?
• Best Practices?