L.O: Understand how to improve sentences.

• What is a....
• NOUN?
• ADJECTIVE?
• VERB?
• ADVERB?

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Sentence types

• STARTER ACTIVITY
• Complete the sheet

Experiment with complex sentences

• Even though
• Despite
• If
• Whilst
• Although
• Verbs ending in 'ING' 'Running' 'Walking' 'Looking'

Your description

• 1 simple sentence to begin
• 2 compound
• 2 Complex
• 1 simple sentence to finish

Swap...

• Quality of vocab 1- :-( 5 - :-)
• Extension: Have they tried using some imagery as well?
• How accurate are the sentences

Varying Sentence Openings

• Follow the instructions to create a fantastic description, using a variety of openings to your sentences. Open with the sentence below:
• The train began to slow down.

Varying Sentence Openings

• Follow the instructions to create a fantastic description, using a variety of openings to your sentences. Open with the sentence below:
• It dropped quietly through the letter box

Open your next sentence with an ADVERB

Next, ask a QUESTION

Next, open with a NOUN

Next, begin with an adjective

End with a short, SIMPLE sentence for impact

It dropped quietly through the letter box.

• Slowly, he crept towards it with the stealth of a jaguar.
• Cautiously, he crept his way towards the crumpled letter.
• Cautiously, as I approached the letter, tension engulfed the air.
• Cautiously, the young boy tiptoed towards the crumpled letter, his heart beating fast.
• Inconspicuously, it floated down to the padded carpet, as quiet as a mouse's footsteps.
• Silently, I tiptoed towards the ominous crumpled package waiting for me at the door.

Improve!

LO: To improve my writing with senses and punctuation

Add senses to your creative writing checklist

Using semi colons...

• A semi colon is used to link together two separate, but related sentences. It replaces a full stop.
• Where would you put the semi colon below?
• The boat was moored close to the shore. Small lazy waves lapped against her bow.

can a semi colon be used below?

• As I appraoched the cooker, I could tell I had fried the bacon to nothing more than meat-smelling cardboard. It was the perfect meal for my sister.
• Liverpool's corner goal by Firmino yesterday was a thing of beauty.

Colons

• A colon is used to either introduce a list or an important point
• I think we all know what to do: think before we write.
• To write an accurate description, the following must be attempted: varied and accurate syntax, varied sentences openings, sensory descriptions...

Watch this clip! You are going to write about it....

Furniture game

• Weather
• Animal
• Furniture
• USAIN BOLT / DONALD TRUMP / LADY GA GA

SMAPO

• Write two sentences describing either the spider or the man
• Use a simile, metaphor or personification in your sentence

The sibilant sub clause spider

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